how to become more advanced??

[videnda]

what I usually so is write a really crappy sorta vague post, and then go in and add details to every little thing.

ex. she nodded, he was probably right. it was getting too cold to stay outside
turns into
ex. she nodded reluctantly, as much as she hated to admit it... he was probably right. she was sure that he woukd love to hear that. it was getting too cold to stay outside, she had realized, as the snow swirled around them rising up over their paws and making it hard to walk and doing nothing to keep them warm. if they didn't go in soon, they woukd freeze.